Broken Monoku is a senryu/haiku with a slight enigmatic/ambiguous flavour, written in its earlier Japanese form as a one liner.A ceaesura (pause) may be appropriate, dictated by sense or speech rhythm,and usually very little punctusation.Seventeen syllables or less.
.In my Broken Monoku variation there is a break at the caesura making it into two lines as below.They may also be in a sequence form.
#1 listen to the pause -
silence is golden
#3 in the midst of death -
lichens come to life
#3 a kite overhead -
still as a road-kill
#4 the snow covers the pasture -
the haystacks disappear
#6 the school-bus departs -
she eats the advent candy
#9 carol concert prelude-
chatter of innocents
#12 footsteps in the street -
echos of a distant youth
BROKEN MONOKU SEQUENCE
#A
a perambulator arrives - emptiness takes its leave
*
a quietness descends - fresher term opens
*
room-to-let sign illumes - emptiness returns
.In my Broken Monoku variation there is a break at the caesura making it into two lines as below.They may also be in a sequence form.
#1 listen to the pause -
silence is golden
#3 in the midst of death -
lichens come to life
#3 a kite overhead -
still as a road-kill
#4 the snow covers the pasture -
the haystacks disappear
#6 the school-bus departs -
she eats the advent candy
#9 carol concert prelude-
chatter of innocents
#12 footsteps in the street -
echos of a distant youth
BROKEN MONOKU SEQUENCE
#A
a perambulator arrives - emptiness takes its leave
*
a quietness descends - fresher term opens
*
room-to-let sign illumes - emptiness returns
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