Monday, 31 December 2007

BROKEN MONOKU- haiku in one broken line


Broken Monoku is a senryu/haiku with a slight enigmatic/ambiguous flavour, written in its earlier Japanese form as a one liner.A ceaesura (pause) may be appropriate, dictated by sense or speech rhythm,and usually very little punctusation.Seventeen syllables or less.
.In my Broken Monoku variation there is a break at the caesura making it into two lines as below.They may also be in a sequence form.



#1 listen to the pause -
                                        silence is golden

#3 in the midst of death -
                                           lichens come to life


#3 a kite overhead -
                                   still as a road-kill


#4 the snow covers the pasture -
                                                      the haystacks disappear


#6 the school-bus departs -
                                              she eats the advent candy

#9 carol concert prelude-
                                          chatter of innocents

#12 footsteps in the street -
                                               echos of a distant youth

BROKEN MONOKU SEQUENCE

#A

a perambulator arrives - emptiness takes its leave
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a quietness descends - fresher term opens
*
room-to-let sign illumes - emptiness returns


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